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The copper man and Labrador (Free verse) by Caducus

Somewhere on Mayfair pavements amongst the flock of drones, a jelly necked vagrant lay dead on polystyrene, dressed in shadows from Versace and copper they flicked. His Labrador licked him, then changed from gold to blue. Barking and biting at neon reapers who took away his master muzzling his grief. Embedded in the vagrants palm was a medal from King George. The pauper box is planed. Lets just bury him he's shrapnel for our conscience and I'm late for my meeting.

Sunny 30-Mar-06/7:32 PM
I know you are full of commentary on this one, but I think I'll take a stabb at one, after reading your poem & other's comments...Their were quite a bit of references that I didn't "get," like when the dog turned blue...I have to say that is pretty hard translate that into a siren's lights-too random & out of the blue for me at least. I must admit I had my difficulties with "neon reapers" as well :( I did however, think this poem was well thought out & surfaces a man's best friend/ love emotion, that brilliantly contrasted with human greed-inevitable human greed. It touched me, not going to lie. I might be a sap for that, but because it was able to surface a little emotion after I read it, I give you two thumbs up on this one :)

~Sunny




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