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The Rose (Free verse) by sk8rs_rule_all

The rose is dying gracefully, aging with love. Its distinct beauty lies where it was once before. The smell of each rises out of each petal, as if it were just picked. The color switching from white, to pink, to brown.

eliastemplar 20-Nov-05/7:30 PM
Try "The smell rises out of each petal." The repetition of "each" is an obstacle for the reader.




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