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Posted Pelicans (Free verse) by Dovina

Comes a purple hue stealing away the day as a guitar slides in slowly stealing silence far away A pelican flaps in clumsily calks a massive beak manages its misdesign and settles on a post Shadows merely hint but never never tell of sadness sweetly coming deeply red and gold Peaks above still glisten brightly lit with snow this winter seaside Friday lapping waves below Thirteen awkward birds descended in a row each upon a post settled in what they know

Dovina 5-Nov-05/2:13 PM
Dear everyone who cares and doesn’t,

Along the coast of LaLa Land, we sometimes watch sunset on Pacific Ocean’s horizon and a little later see coast-range peaks still glistening snow in post-sunset glow. Pelicans post themselves on posts in post-day and post wisdom like Post-It notes with cocked beaks — poor misdesigned birds.

I wrote “calks,” a misspelling of “cocks,” in what Freud would have called “penis envy” which subconsciously prevented my using the loaded “cocks.” His theory supposedly explains the envy many women feel of men's status and career opportunities — as if such feelings required a theory, especially one with such a provocative and misleading name. It makes you think of those few women who want a penis so badly they'd consider surgery to obtain one. But penis envy was never meant that way by silly Freud. Anyway, I’ve changed it to “cocks” and wait patiently for interpretations.

As for the off/on rhyming, well, I’m not as good as I once was. But once, I’m as good as I ever was, once upon a time — Wuntz. Now everybody sing along.




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