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A Barefoot Day in the Park (Free verse) by Dovina

I’ve decided to sit and wait nothing more to do My feet can take root wet earth between my toes like a girl again moss growing over my hands leaves from my fingers Maybe a child will climb me that boy throwing pebbles onto an empty fountain too much wisdom for his age feeling misplaced not made for this world I wanted to say to him: If not you, who?

ALChemy 28-Sep-05/3:45 PM
Good except "leaves from my fingers" seems to have no metaphoric or symbolic reason and is not based in reality either. Maybe something more like "leaves in my hair".
The title reminds me of that Redford and Fonda movie.




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