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Acrylic French Nails (Free verse) by Dovina

Her glistening nails, long and thick, newly crafted— the French acrylic style, transparent finish over finger flesh, opaque on talon ends, where were the color ordinary would have trimmed in white or pink. Nothing I’d not want for mine, save cost and upkeep, (growth requiring fill, aging causing cracks) and yes, one other thing— her French nail ends were green. Still I complimented her sincerely then couldn’t figure why, except for shine and shape and for a rating of herself a person worth adorning. Thank you, she replied, I wanted to look different. Then an answer rose within in vindication of my praise, for I could not imagine one so bored with looking right she employs devices to be different.

ALChemy 12-Jun-05/7:30 AM
I stumbled over the last three lines a little in verse 1 on my first reading. Maybe "It would be trimmed in"
would be easier but it won't kill me if you keep it the way it is. Try omitting the word style in verse 1 and see if it gives it a better flow. I really like the original idea of using the woman's nails to symbolize a unique lifestyle even if I was kinda hoping for a catfight at the end.




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