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Make Music in Your Heart (Free verse) by Dovina

Stroke your bow upon the strings if in your heart a melody sings and the sound you make will thrill all listening souls Teachers tell you scales to learn and musicianship must be earned but their salaries they protect and you will go in debt So raise a bow and hold a cello think loving thoughts of some fine fellow and the sounds that flow if you have no doubt will wander the room so sweet they’ll call you back to repeat. This is how I learned the piano and how I’ve learned to write now

Hadasl 5-Apr-05/11:37 PM
The content is great, but the flow is awful. Though there were some mediocre lines, for example:
'This is how I learned the piano
and how I’ve learned to write now'
It sounds like a 5 year old wrote it. And by the way, we are all still learning.
The flow seems very elementary and abecedarian, so please work on that.
As well, learn to accept criticism. Your comments to the reviews, (any comment to reviewing, if not for elucidation, is wrong in my opinion) were extremely puerile. Accept it, and move on. You shouldn't try to fight with people to change their views to ones you agree with. Be mature.




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