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Paradelle of Progress (Other) by Dovina

I remember the thin form of nervous strain I remember the thin form of nervous strain And emotional deposit on blank page And emotional deposit on blank page I deposit and remember the form of thin strain Emotional blank on nervous page

Dan garcia-Black 6-Jul-04/10:53 AM
When last I fought the sixest paradelle, the referee admonished me about using "only those words" by instructing me that I could use other forms of "only those words." This allows "thinning forms" or "emotionally blank" "and other aberrations. Perhaps, my English prof was an aberration. Still, a -10- for 1/6th of a complete poem... Are you going for a combined score of 60 for whole poem? I'm drawing a nervous, emotional blank on the proper score.




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