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Sustained (Free verse) by Dovina

With capacity to recognize Shortcomings in himself, The shortfall between his life And his art, He drives toward abasement With inflexible morality, Like a river to the sea, Carrying garbage in its wash. Black eddies shock his soul, Tragedies pinch a narrow life, Something soured, embittered, Like late September smog. He groans and shudders and pushes on. The more he submits to the drag Of moral gravitation, Striving to achieve distance, while cleaving to his friends, The more a reactive thrust rises, Sustaining as he seeks to descend. He drives earthward, pulled skyward, A marvel of levitation. Reactive waves, Rebounding, falling, Rebounding.

god'swife 28-Jun-04/1:01 PM
I felt a certain hostility from you before I ever felt one towards you. It's extremely difficult, to say the least, to guess at the motives or intentions of a human being by reading some typed out words. Here is a brief history of our relationship so far from my POV, naturally.

I read your poem Riddle of Creation and I didn't like it, most especially because of title. I read your poem Quiet Hills(sorry, I know the titles wrong) and liked it. At that particular time I had just finished Clear Night Rising, which has quit a bit in common with your Hills poem, and which by coincidence, was originally titled 'June Hills' I changed the title as I was submitting it because I didn't like the way it looked. I thought it was cool that your poem had a similar title and a similar theme as my poem. After reading your two poems I was rummaged around the site, as I tend to do before I feel 'in the groove' enough to comment on anything. I ran into McFan's comment on the comments page, and it pissed me off, because it, in my oppinion it was completely inappropriate to the poem, and just one more example of poemranker stupidity. After I posted my reply to McFan's comment, you posted a reply to me which I took/mistook to mean you are pretty level-headed with a goodly amount of self-esteem and I could just be straight-forward with you. You asked me to critiqque your poem so I did. what you don't know is that right after I posted my critique I went to your Hills poem and praised it. 'How much thought....'.'How much have you studied...' were issues I approached again on that poem in comparison to the Riddle poem. These two poems are so completely different when it comes to a show of talent, as to appear to be written by different people. I can see how the critique I left on the Riddles poem offended you. I didn't mean it as such. I posted "...If this poem is any measure I would have to assume the answer to both these questions would be 'none'.” IF this poem is a measure. IF, which it is not. I would have to ASSUME. I count much on assumption. I was just trying to say the poem doesn't stand up to your ability. I never never never claimed that you were one of the spineless folk. I never insulted you personally, I insulted your poem, it deserved it. Go look at it.

After writing my comment on your Hills poem I hit submit and the site had a brain fart, so I went back to the comments page to see if it had posted, that's when I saw your reply to my critique of your Riddles poem. After reading that and your hurt reply on my Clear Night poem or what ever the fuck it was, I just wrote you off.

(I'm posting the rest of this comment seperately because it won't allow me to post the whole thing as one great big gush of hot air)




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